OH GAWD this story SO SUCKED!!! It was one of the worst I've ever read! As bad, if not worse than most of the rewrites out there. It doesn't even rank as amateurish. No imagination, piss poor vocabulary and the dialogue was the worst ever as it was too repetitive and went nowhere. The artwork was decent, but the sorriness of the story totally overrode it, and just made this one of the worst. The story line made no sense at all as it did not even follow a path. Not worth reading, rating, or even looking at. Whoever printed and produced this has no taste.
Wasn't at all fappable. Three thumbs way down. The one couldn't even get up, and I doubt I will even be able to get it up for at least a month after this junk. Is there a rating of less than half a star or a negative?
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I agree... stupid that... Great story though. Love the ending. "Mamma already thought we were lovers... Papa might kill you..."
okay... don't get the ending...
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Another stupid, poorly written rewrite. No imagination. No vocabulary above elementary school level.
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Finally... a pretty decent rewrite... too bad the artwork was so bad.
Sweet, wholesome, family entertainment...
I love seeing a short, fat guy get the win. Would have given full marks if not for the sloppy art work.
I want a hugging pillow. Where can I get one?
Yup... saw that ending cumming from 100 miles away.... Still, full marks and 3 thumbs up...
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I had to favorite this one. I was exactly like that guy when I was in school, and I was looking, but never found, a girl just like her. Thank you, JBRandom.
Anarchy rulez...
Too short: I mean, he could have explained that it was the Earthling's mating ritual done between a male and a female of the species, and that is how they multiply and have offspring. He could have also informed her that it is a practice that is shunned by society when performed by family members, all while teaching her about different styles (i.e. anal, oral) and positions for greater pleasure...
Where's the rest? The ending... Can't stop in the middle. Now what am supposed to do with this?
Damn... that was a mommy that only a son could love....
love the little girl... she so cute... so funny...
Yeah, love to see the underdog win...
I gave up about page 10. Everyone looks exactly the same, so I had no idea who was who, and the story was confusing, so couldn't follow. I didn't understand a thing. Needless to say, only half a star, and that's because no stars does nothing to its over all rating. I must say, they were cute though. Over all, it completely sucked.
Insulin... must have in-su-li.........
She never said it...
I love her....
me thinks he was just messin wit her...
I think this needs the emotionless tag, as the girl was totally emotionless. I was thinking she looked tsundere, but wasn't even that. I wonder if there was no onee, and it was just her who set things up... we can all hope...

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